Well the comments I received on my second elevator pitch were significantly more positive than the comments on the first. I appreciated all of the feedback that I received. I want to apologize for the quality of this video because I recently got into an accident and am not able to do much. I believe that what stood out to me was the fact that everyone seemed to believe I was very confident. My confidence is what drives me to succeed.
I just tried to continue to talk more confidently to show that I truly believe in my idea. The more confidence I exude the better I can sell may product.
I think you are improving as far as your pitches go. I can tell from seeing you from your last pitch that you are starting to get more excited about your project. Maybe next time go into further detail. You definitely are on the right path to success just keep working hard.
ReplyDeleteHi Brandon. I am so sorry about your accident! When you're feeling better, don't film yourself looking down at the camera - keep the camera at eye level. I agree with Ben, you need to go into a little more detail about your business idea. Keep your commentary on any feedback out of the video and just write that in the summary. Your pitch just needs to reflect your business idea, and your goal is to gain interest, and hopefully, investors! Good luck and here's a link to my blog post: http://generationxonfleek.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3-its-about-efficiency.html
ReplyDeleteHi Brandon!
ReplyDeleteI agree with the other comments that you should change your camera position because it is a bit unprofessional/awkward to see you at that angle and I think it distorts your voice! Other than that, I liked your pitch and with some tweaking it'll be perfect! Good luck!
Here is my pitch if you'd like to check it out! http://sirahmora.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
DeleteHey Brandon,
ReplyDeleteI hope you feel better, I'm sorry about your accident. I think you did a good job at trying to present it but like everybody said already maybe try and go into more details. Here's my blog: http://feliciaent3003.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html